Okay here is my first Trailer that I have made for my clan. It is my first so keep the laughing to a minimum please! If there are any questions please ask me!

Hope you like:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=F3ALJSoRg5w

This Trailer is published under Spartan Productions.

NOTE: This is NOT an advertisement I merely want feedback on how to make it better. And to make future projects as good, or better.

Alright: Sequence #1 on Tibanna I think? You were using freecam. My suggestion, make the movements more fluid. You seemed to move the camera rapidly, almost randomly. I'd also suggest turning off names in multiplayer.

This may be a personal preference, but I hate it when people use them playing out. Its annoying, and in this case, you didn't even remove the HUD.

Also, there's a scene that fades to black when you die. Dying= not very good in a promoting video.

And in the death star, there's a hall way sequence, where you avoid the enemy and go through from around. Avoid that.

Also, try to match video with music.

Use a more unique text as well.

Not a perfect example, but take a look here:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QIkIbJvO ... annel_page

EDIT: Wow, I violated so many of my own rules in that vid....

Grev wrote:Alright: Sequence #1 on Tibanna I think? You were using freecam. My suggestion, make the movements more fluid. You seemed to move the camera rapidly, almost randomly. I'd also suggest turning off names in multiplayer.

This may be a personal preference, but I hate it when people use them playing out. Its annoying, and in this case, you didn't even remove the HUD.

Also, there's a scene that fades to black when you die. Dying= not very good in a promoting video.

And in the death star, there's a hall way sequence, where you avoid the enemy and go through from around. Avoid that.

Also, try to match video with music.

Use a more unique text as well.

Not a perfect example, but take a look here:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QIkIbJvO ... annel_page

EDIT: Wow, I violated so many of my own rules in that vid....

Well I understand where you are coming from with the FreeCam thing it is just really hard to control.

The reason I kept names and HUD was to portray everyone that it was a player playing not an AI (Which is a common mistake.

I didn't remove HUD because it just seemed the right thing to do at the time. . .

The dying I know really bad.

I was leaving the main hall to go into a flanking maneuver while my team mate held the hall. I see that no one got that I guess.

I didn't match the music to the video because I thought to many people did that and, personally I thought the music matched pretty well.

Text yeah not very unique I admit.

Please keep in mind that this is my first vid. For a first vid I didn't think it was that bad, but *sigh* I guess I was mistaken.

*EDIT* I watched it again and I see your point. . .

Also keep in mind this is version one I plan to do another just like this one except without so many. . .scrupals.

I didn't say it was bad.

Also, you misunderstood me with the music. What I meant with music matching was for video and music to go in sync, so while there is a calm slow moment in the music, you are dropping nukes. The only example I can think of in my own video is during the luke smash thing I repeated three times in my own fits with the beat of the music.

Ah okay.

Thank you for your impute I didn't notice any of those things so I am going to make a Version 2 of the Trailer!